The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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very important for
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life, which
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and
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are very
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convenience
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for folks, it is seen like
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cannot live without these smart tools. Some residents are arguing if
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buying and selling stuff through
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, so that, the retailer will
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not
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longer
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outcome. I agree with that, we will have
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retails
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shop
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in the future. Many businesses have built websites in order to reach a wider audience of buyers, allowing
people
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to
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anywhere and anytime.
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, a lot of
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have
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ordering
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is it easier and save time.
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, shoppers can enjoy
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stuff as well.
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, a small town or village
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less
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populations which if the sellers need to pay rent and salary and they
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return. I believe they will prefer to run
thier
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their
business through to website
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of open a
shop
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and only can get fever customers.
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, some
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will not be
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shutdown
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shut down
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,
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as chemist, glasses and bottle shops, because folks must walk
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what they
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. In conclusion, I agree in the small town or countryside will have
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fewer shops
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shop
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in the future, but in the cities might be different, which they have travellers and foreigners.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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