The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

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for folks, it is seen like

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buying and selling stuff through

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in the future. Many businesses have built websites in order to reach a wider audience of buyers, allowing

people

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anywhere and anytime.

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people

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ordering

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is it easier and save time.

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, shoppers can enjoy

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stuff as well.

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populations which if the sellers need to pay rent and salary and they

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return. I believe they will prefer to run

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their

business through to website

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of open a

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and only can get fever customers.

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, some

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will not be

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such

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what they

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. In conclusion, I agree in the small town or countryside will have

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shop

in the future, but in the cities might be different, which they have travellers and foreigners.

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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem?

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extend do you agree or disgree with this statement?

People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group that they belong to than other factors. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward student who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Mothers play key roles in the upbringing of children. But in the recent times both parents are getting busy with professional life. Who in your opinion should take the responsibility of child care now?