Finding job satisfaction is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. why do you think that is? Do you think job satisfaction is important?

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Satifaction

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Satisfaction

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important

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refers to having a luxurious lifestyle. In the

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way and how much important it is to have

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lifestyle. To start with, These nations have a huge unemployment rate and

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in their fields of interest.

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the population in these countries is huge and

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of earning

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is less.

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settle on any

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to get money to feed their families.

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, Educated Engineers have settled in irrelevant fields because they have no choice and their family is dependant on them.

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means having a healthy

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life style

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as it gives peace of mind and

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work more efficiently when are happy.

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of the family and it gets easy to support them.Stress at

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these days, most popular is

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attack. To conclude,

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satisfaction leads to

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mindset and results in more productivity.

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Finding job satisfaction is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. why do you think that is? Do you think job satisfaction is important?

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries, the number of plants and animals are declining. why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehical will be passenger. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

Art classes, such as painting and drawing are as important to a child's development as other subjects so it should bes compulsory in high schools. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some people think a country benefits from a large proportion of young university students, others think sending young people to universities only lead to graduate unemployment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.