Finding job satisfaction is considered to be a luxury in many developing countries. why do you think that is? Do you think job satisfaction is important?

Job
Satifaction
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Satisfaction
plays an
importantant
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important
role in our daily life .
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, It is believed by some
people
developing
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countries that
good
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job
refers to having a luxurious lifestyle. In the
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, I'll discuss why do
people
think
this
way and how much important it is to have
a
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job
satisfaction for
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle. To start with, These nations have a huge unemployment rate and
people
do not get
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a job
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job
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in their fields of interest.
This
is because
,
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the population in these countries is huge and
number
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a number
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of earning
people
is less.
People
settle on any
job
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in order
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inorder
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in order
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to get money to feed their families.
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example
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In
india
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, Educated Engineers have settled in irrelevant fields because they have no choice and their family is dependant on them.
Secondly
, having
good
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job
means having a healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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as it gives peace of mind and
people
work more efficiently when are happy.
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It helps to meet
demands
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of the family and it gets easy to support them.Stress at
job
leads to lots of
disease
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these days, most popular is
heart
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a heart
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attack. To conclude,
Job
satisfaction leads to
healthy
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a healthy
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mindset and results in more productivity.
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