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Open-plan offices offer a better working environment for staff than a normal office. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#open-plan #offices #offer #environment #staff #office
Office
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 is
place
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a place
the place
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 where every
employee
wish
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wishes
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 to promote
their self
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themself
themselves
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 with better new ideas. Good ideas
needs
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need
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good
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a good
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 environment of surroundings. In
upcoming
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an upcoming
the upcoming
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 paragraph, I will discuss
good
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a good
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 atmosphere around staff with
wider
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a wider
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 space
of
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for
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office
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the office
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 area. Whereas, There are some people who like normal working type
office
.
At
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In
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 the end, I will give my opinion. If I say about
good
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the good
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 environment of
office
then
 many things to
be happened
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happen
have happened
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 after that.
First
 of all,
Good
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a Good
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 area of
office
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the office
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 is
wall
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a wall
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 from where
good
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a good
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 atmosphere
created
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is created
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 like proper good lighting with
warmfull
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warmful
harmful
warm full
 pictures of group photos. For that, Good unexpected things are come out
from
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of
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employees
mind
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minds
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.
For example
, Every manager of
office
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the office
an office
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 should create one part of
office
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the office
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 with good
warmfull
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warmful
warm full
 lightning and picturing.
Therefore
, They held
everythings
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everything
 in
this
 room like meetings, projects and so on.
Secondly
,
Open
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an Open
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 space with no upside roof is just like dream for every
employee
.
In addition
,
employee
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the employee
an employee
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 feels freshening with open fresh air and
not
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do not
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 feel uncomfortable with lots of stress. There are
also
small
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a small
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 group of people who think that
perticular
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particular
office
 is
best
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the best
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 choice for them.
First
, it feels like up-to-date working life with
table
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a table
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 and chair.
Employee
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Employees
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 have chitchat to other
employees
 for their difficulties
next
 to their chair.
For example
,
employee
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employees
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 have
chance
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a chance
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 to create their room as per their wish with lots of photos at
desk's
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desks
desk
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. We see
every where
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everywhere
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 that
office
 manager can arrange each section from where
employees
meets
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meet
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 other
employees
 with short timings.
Therefore
,
Any
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in Any
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 critical situation they
meets
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meet
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 up within
few
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a few
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 seconds.
Secondly
,
This
 kind of normal
offices
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office
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promote
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promotes
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 group works. Somewhat,
office
 workers share their work
to
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with
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other
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others
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 in any critical situation.
On
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In
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 conclusion, working life is too
hactic
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hectic
 life
because
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ofbecause
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 time management and all things.
Office
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The office
An office
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 should be very comfortable
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in
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at
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a
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 very
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quiet
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quite
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quiet
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 place.
For
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From
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 my perspective,
its
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it's
it is
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upto
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up to
 their choice which type of
office
 work should be done but for
me
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,me
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 open space is
best
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the best
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 one for many reasons.
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