The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
The figures compare the current site of the Islip town
centre
and the planned development in the future. We can see that the new design proposal involves making a few changes to the central area, mainly within the dual carriageway.
There’s
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not many switches in
school
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and housing places. The most noticeable change is that there will be a dual carriageway circling around the
centre
to connect
school
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the school
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, housing and
the
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park
. A walking lane which is only for pedestrians will replace the main road where the southern part of the shops will remain nearby.
However
, the northern shops will be significantly expanded to a shopping
centre
with a bus station and a car
park
on both sides.
Moreover
, the land on the east side within the
centre
will
also
be used for housing. What will remain in the same southern position is the school in the west and the
park
in the east except for a slight shrink in the proportion of the latter one. Housing will account for the largest part located in the south urban area, in and out of the carriageway,
while
another new housing district will be established
next
to the
park
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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