You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter. • Describe the item • Explain where and when you left it • Say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear Manager, I am writing to you concerning an item I lost during my

last

trip from Abuja to Lagos. I boarded the Abuja rail on the 24th of January to Lagos,

however

after I disembarked, I noticed that my

laptop

bag was lighter than usual. After checking in, I couldn't find my HP

laptop

This

is a 14-inches

laptop

, Bluetooth and wireless network-enabled.

Also

, it is ash-coloured and it has the HP logo at the back of the screen. To be honest, I left the

laptop

on top of my luggage,

besides

where I sat during the trip and I was conscious of the bag, just to be sure that it was safe.

Although

, I stepped out of the carriage once,

however

, I returned immediately to my seat after visiting the lounge. For now, I would need your support to help track and maybe retrieve the

laptop

. You can start by asking your staff, if they've seen the type of computer described or if they've seen any stray

laptop

left on the train. I hope you can help out with finding

this

device, I will be so happy if found eventually. Kindly let me know if there is any information on the finding. Yours faithfully, Rotimi

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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thirdly
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also
for example
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although
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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

207 words

8.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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