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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia Write at least 150 words.

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Dear sir or madam, My name is Sara Ahmadi and I read your advertisement when I was at university. I noticed that you need someone to take care of your child for about six months. having been satisfied, as I really love
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 job and
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 I had
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 duty when I was in my own country .
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, you should not be worried because I have enough experience . As I mentioned before, my relationship with children is fantastic and I really enjoy spending time with them.
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 why all of my
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 employees trust me a lot .
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, these days I work in our university kindergarten in my free time and I
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 could get a recommendation from my boss if you
need
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. I am looking forward to
receive
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 your answer. Yours faithfully Sara Ahmadi

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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