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Some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time. Others believe that it is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

#people #buildings #flats #houses #time #accommodation
In the present scenario, different types of buildings are designed and everyone has dreams to live in a comfortable house.
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 it is sometimes thought
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the builder
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builder
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 should take a long
time
 to
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build
 them, others believe that accommodation should provide in
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time
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 affordable prices as well. In my opinion, I consider that if accommodation
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built
 in more
time
 than it
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 a lot of benefits. There are several reasons why flats and houses should be designed to
last
 a long
time
. The
first
 and foremost important thing is that it would be more durable.
In addition
, masons do their work more efficiently if they have enough
time
.
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one survey has conducted in the Uk that whenever people try to do anything quickly, they make mistakes and it is not done in
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 way.
Hence
, long
time
 construction is durable and long life. Another reason to consider people think that which buildings have done in their fixed construction
time
 means it is more
relaibale
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reliable
 because builder put more
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 when they have a good enough
time
.
Furthermore
, sometimes raw materials
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 available in the market and they have to wait for it
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if someone does not want to wait and use bad material.
On the other hand
, some opponents have
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opposite
view
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views
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.
Firstly
,
population
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 are drastically increasing, that's why society needs more
accommodtions
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accommodations
accommodation
.
Secondly
, the higher price of houses
are
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 not affordable for everyone.
Therefore
, it can say that residential should be quickly and cheaply. In the conclusion, It is true that there are numerous advantages to
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houes
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houses
 and flats
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particular
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time
, but other
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 should not neglect.
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