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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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The role of
universities
 has been always controversial.Several different opinions
are existed
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.Some people believe that some abilities and information,which are beneficial for
work
,should be
taugh
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taught
 at
universities
.
On the other hand
,it is argued that
universities
 just play a role in increasing the students
knowlege
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knowledge
, and it
dosent
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doesn't
 matter the given data are helpful and practical for their
job
 or not.I agree with the
first
 opinion.In
this
 essay,I will discuss both viewpoints and support my ideas with some examples.
Firstly
,it is considered that the vast majority of people decide to study specific field to find out
job
 and earn income,
also
 they want to promote their career day by day.For reaching these goals,
student
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the student
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 should learn
a
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apply
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speciall
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special
 skills that their
work
need
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.they definitely have
high
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a high
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 quality of practical
work
 to be hired by
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the employer
an employer
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employer
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.
therefore
,
universities
 must focus on useful information
can
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that can
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 aid their
job
.
For instance
,for
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the biologist
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biologist
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biologists
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, some units of
laboratory
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the laboratory
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 should be boosted,as
result
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,result
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 they totally learn how to act in
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laboratory
.
Secondly
,I should say,if students have the noticeable knowledge but they are not able to
work
,
this
knowlege
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knowledge
 completely is wasted,so if we want to improve our society,economic and the approach of
work
,we will learn the amount of data which are associated with
condition
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the condition
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 of their career. In conclusion, in
universities
,students face
with
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some groups of information.Some of
that
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them
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are
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 helpful for their
job
,and some of
that
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them
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are
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is
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 not appropriate for their future career.
Finally
,
universities
 should give necessary data that you can improve their
job
 with
usage
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the usage
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 of them.
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  • Lifelong learning
  • Holistic development
  • Vocational training
  • Industry-specific competencies
  • Critical thinking
  • Creative problem-solving
  • Academic research
  • Intellectual development
  • Ethics and values
  • Societal contribution
  • Job market demands
  • Practical training
  • Internships
  • Knowledge advancement
  • Global challenges
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