Government of developing country should spend more on projects (eg new tourist hotel, factories) to improve local economy and less on facilities (eg health and education) To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The authorities must fund projects like tourist hotels and factories to improve the local economy and less money on
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and
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services. In my view, I partially agree because
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and
education
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are some of the basic needs of human beings.
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with,
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and
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is
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part of the
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physiological needs of humans which more funds need to
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on by the
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. What
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implies is that when money is spent by the
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on the hospitals
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will help the
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care workers to provide quality care for the
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which would eventually boost the
growth
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of the economy.
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, if
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provide money for
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care
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would make the
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of the county healthy and
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be able to contribute their quota to the
growth
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of the nation.
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, the
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needs to fund the
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system, with
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there would be many professionals in the
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that can work in harmony to boost the
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country
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economy. many studies have shown that the higher the
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spend
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spends
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on the
education
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system the higher the
growth
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of the
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.
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, it is
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beneficial to spend on projects
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as hostels and factories.
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is because
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would provide job opportunities for the
people
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of the
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and
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chances to relax .it will
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boost the
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of the
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when
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from other countries come for tourists in the nation
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this
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would contribute to the development of the nation. In conclusion, the
government
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should spend on
education
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and
health
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systems as they are the basic needs of human beings.
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, funds for other services
such
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as hotels and factories cannot be ignored.

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