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What are the Advantages and Disadvantages of traveling with a group?

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In the present world,
majority
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 of
people
 tend to
travel
 with a
group
.
Group
travel
 refers to
travel
 with a
group
 arranged by an outside company or organization or
travel
 with a
group
 of friends and family that you have organized yourself. There are some advantages and disadvantages of it, and they will be discussed in
this
 essay.
First
 of all, one evident benefit to
travel
 with a
group
 is it is
cost effective
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cost-effective
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 so that it allows
people
 to lower their cost of travelling.
In other words
, the value of
whole
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the whole
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 trip will be shared with the members, and
this
 paves the way for saving some money.
For example
, there are a lot of companies which organize travelling trips
with
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at
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 low prices.
Also
, travelling with
people
 from your country removes the stress of having to struggle in a foreign language all day long.
People
 can follow their groupmates in difficult situations or ask their
travel
 guide for help.
On the other hand
, it has some disadvantages. Coming up with a good plan, a schedule and a time of the year
which
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that
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 will be agreed upon by all the members is difficult. It is rare for all members of a
goup
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group
 to share the same interests, so there will be always someone who is dissatisfied.
Therefore
, travellers have to concede some parts of
plan
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the plan
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. Another disadvantage worth noting is that
,
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apply
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traveller
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the traveller
a traveller
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 is
goup
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group
 communicate only with each other and avoid
to ask anything to
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asking
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 local
people
because
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anything because
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 they do not actually need it.
Consequently
, solo
travelers
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travellers
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 are more inclined to meet new
people
 and make new friends. To sum up, travelling with a
group
 is profitable in terms of cost efficiency and the chance of taking benefits of assistance.
However
, it has some disadvantages
such
 as converging ideas and plans and lack of chance to communicate with locals and meet new
people
.
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