You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests. You do NOT need to write any address. You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Principal, I am writing to you concerning my son, Tunde, who will be joining your

school

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at the beginning of the

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school

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term. We will be moving from Lagos to Abuja and according to my search, your

school

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looks like the type that I would want my son to attend, as

such

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I would like to know if he can be admitted into your

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. Just to highlight some of his achievements so far, he represented his

school

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at the

last

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Cowbellpedia, a national inter-

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mathematics competition and he came

second

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-best overall.

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, he topped his

last

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class (a class of 200 students) with a total of 95% grade score overall.

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, he has represented his

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in various literary competitions

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. If you are interested, I would be willing to bring you some of the testimonials received.

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, he is quite interested in STEM subjects:

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Science, Technology, Engineering and Mathematics. He wants to be an engineer after high

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and I have been encouraging him to pursue his interests.

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, I do hope to get a response on your decision concerning the admission as requested,

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, if you need supporting documents in order to make your comments, kindly reach out to me. Thank you for your time and do have a wonderful day ahead of you. Yours faithfully, Rotimi

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

225 words

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