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In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents home once they finish school. They start living on their own or share a home with friends. Some people think it is a positive thing. Do you agree or disagree?

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Over the
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 two or three decades, the youngsters have been living separately after finishing
school
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 tremendously than ever before due to they would like to live in an autonomous way.
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, some think that
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 is a positive aspect; I strongly agree with
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 statement
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and
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 briefly for the following reasons.
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 with, because young people have to leave theirs' home when they are completing
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, they would be independently rather than staying with
parents
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,
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, they can be
learnt
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 many things from theirs' own experience.
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, in America, all youngsters stay separately or with friends when they are finishing
school
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;
this
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 country
encourage
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this
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 kind of good thing in order to they are being
independently
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 than any parts of
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the
 world.
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,
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 is the best chance to understand about the
real life
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 situation and how to handle the difficult situation, everything will learn with theirs' own experience.
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,
this
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 is a positive aspect for
parents
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 as well as children.
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, young adults can be known about the value of money when they are living alone or sharing with friends.
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 time they should be worked
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 manage theirs' all expenses like
accomadation
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accommodation
, food and other personal expenses
whle
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while
 they must be known about their
parents
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' struggle and
hardwork
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hard work
.
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, a recent report from a
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 party said that more than 75% of the
americans'
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American
Americans
adult
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adults
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 be
extremly
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extremely
 close and
love
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 with theirs'
parents
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 when they are being alone or staying with friends,
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, family bonding might be very closed for
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 best idea. To conclude, many nations adults like to move to theirs' own house after they are completing
school
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,
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 can give more benefits to the mothers and fathers along with young folks. Being self-sufficient, learning about
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real-life
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real
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 life situation, knowing
value
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 of the money and connecting family bonding is the benefits of
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 trend.
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, I strongly agree with
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 opinion in the above-mentioned details. I hope
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 process is conducive to living happily who are the young folks.
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