Nowadays it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them placed in amusement parks for the purpose of people’s recreation. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Today many amusement parks have

sea

animals for people's leisure

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even though

the population

also

likes to see them tremendously, it's

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negatively.

This

trend has more drawbacks than benefits for

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sea

creatures.

This

essay discusses it briefly for the following reasons. On the one hand, the

sea

creatures should be affected adversely when they are being

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in

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tank

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; they have all rights to live

indepentent

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independent

independently

but the population keeps in

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tiny water

tank

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.

As a result

, they become more aggressive and depressive

such

as the Big mammals.

For instance

, these kinds of

ocean

animals only eat properly when the shows are conducted.

In addition

,

Although

the

staffs

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take care properly, they still now being in

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water tank; they should be lived in theirs' natural place

such

as the

ocean

.

Hence

, should be replaced.

On the other hand

, these kinds of amusement

park

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parks

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have a variety of

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ocean

creature in one place;

this

is the best chance

to

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people can be seen very closely. Because the park's staff can take care properly, parks can collect entrance fees from visitors.

For instance

, India has many aquariums in cities for the tourists-purpose,

thus

, many folks have a chance to see very closely

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different kinds of

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big mammals namely

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and etc. To conclude, people have many entertainments

instead

of seeing the

ocean

creatures in amusement; they have all right to live in their's natural place like the

sea

so should be replaced.

Therefore

, they can live freely and independently. In my opinion, about

this

,

this

trend has many drawbacks than benefits.