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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The topic of whether or not newcomers should conform to the local norms when they settle in a new
country
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 is one
which
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 bears some consideration. Personally, I strongly agree that new inhabitants should follow the social conventions when they come to live in a new
country
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. The
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 of
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 opinion is that blending into the local environment can help foreigners to make friends easier. It is clear to all observers that friendship is built by respect. When foreigners follow the customs and traditions in a host
country
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, they show local residents that they respect their nation and they can gain their affection. Because of
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, new immigrants can avoid the risk of social isolation and become more sociable and likeable in a new
country
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.
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, they can make more friends as well
as
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 enlarge their personal relationship with local
peole
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people
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 reason why
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newcomers
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new comers
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 should adapt to the social behaviour of the nation in which they are living is that they can avoid the risk of violating the rules. It cannot be denied that each
country
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 has different laws and if people try to violate one of them, they will be punished. Singapore is a valuable example in
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 regard, as those who litter are required to appear before the court and receive
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 fine of approximately three thousand dollars. In conclusion, it can be seen that when newcomers conform to the social behaviour of a host
country
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, they have more
chance
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 to have more friends and avoid the risk of punishment by the law.
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Therefore
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 topic.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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