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The best way to increase road safety is to make car drivers retake their driving test every year. Do you agree or disagree?

#road #safety #car #drivers #test #year
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 5.25 million accidents happen every year. Car accidents are a major issue and have killed over 1 million
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. A straightforward solution could be enforcing laws or restrictions that contradict reckless driving. The
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 reason why I think that taking a drivers test every year is because of a change in
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. The elderly to be specific have bad eyesight, and might not realise it. Someone’s arm might hurt because of some issue and might bother them while driving. There are obviously more examples
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 how the body changes in a bad way. The
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 reason is carelessness. When
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 drive for many years, they drive with ease.
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 is a problem because
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 who drive think they can control a vehicle at high speeds.
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 crashes are the most common, it is difficult to control a car that hits 150 in a street, where innocent lives might be taken. The
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 reason is following laws. We might not notice it, but most drivers don't follow directions.
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 they do not get caught, their life could be in danger.
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 who don't follow the traffic laws might put many more lives in danger.
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, driving faster than the speed limit on a freeway will not only cause one crash, but many resulting in the
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 one. I opine that driving tests should be taken every year to ensure safety
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 civilians and drivers. The safety of the community is of utmost importance when it comes to car accidents. Another point worth noting is the grave and sadness within the passeds’ families.
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