Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than history Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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about their tradition or culture
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more important as compared to
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in schools because they believe that it is very helpful for make their better carrier because they learn numerous things from that subjects
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, according to the recent survey , the higher employment rate of students in
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both are equally important just to get success in their life but
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plays a crucial role in
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better future
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