Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than history Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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role in the development of children where some people reckon that
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history
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of the main
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where
one
can know about the importance of culture and tradition but others think that,
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s
such
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and
technology
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role to make better future which I will
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history
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where
one
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about their tradition or culture
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so that
why
this
subject
should be
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compulsory
as a
subject
in all schools because students easily grasp information about
history
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and
also
kids know the
history
of
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gurus which is
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their life
consequently
, it is pricefull way just to know about the
history
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, on the other side , some masses reckon that
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science
and
technology
subject
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more important as compared to
history
in schools because they believe that it is very helpful for make their better carrier because they learn numerous things from that subjects
such
as they get knowledge about the
feild
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field
of advanced
technology
for instance
, according to the recent survey , the higher employment rate of students in
science
subject
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of
history
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successful
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in their
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career
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science
and
technology
subjects are main just to make their better future but
history
subject
should be
compulsary
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compulsory
in all schools just to know about the importance of
history
. To conclude,
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no doubt
both are equally important just to get success in their life but
science
and
technology
plays a crucial role in
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better future
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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