Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places.

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Nowadays, a lot of
museums
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and historical s
ite
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are opened more and more throughout the world for commemorating the h
erosand
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heroes and
kings in twenty-one century passed. And they attract lots of tourists, especially i
n f
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oreign visitors. But the t
hings
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s
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mostly local
people
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a
re not visited
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have not visited
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these
sites
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. So what are the reasons a
bout
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strange case.
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Let's see. The
first
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highlight is that they knew and visited all of these
museums
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and historical
sites
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f
or m
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any times. To more details, to be a local
people
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must know about their g
overment,
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government
ways in their local areas an the most special is their history. So if the
museums
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were simple, m
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ay be
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they would not want to visit again. So what can be done is that these
sites
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' host should update and introduce more antique i
nnheritance
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inheritance
from older generations created. It would attract both tourists and local
people
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v
isit
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to visit
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here. If they updated, there would be more u
pdate,
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like bi-monthly. It could make the museum famous and the attraction would be advertised all over the country.
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, the locals would be more proud of their local area. The
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ightlight
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is m
ay be
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the price are too expensive or the close time is too early. If
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problem happened, not only the local
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but
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the tourist would not afford
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just for the visit. Or the close time is too early can make visitor can not spend it slowly. The effect can be done if the boss l
engthen
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more time or reduce more expense i
nprice.
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in price
It would be better if they did it faster. Despite local
people
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are not v
isited
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visiting
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museums
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and historical
sites
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, they still b
e
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are
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the best way for tourists to know and commemorate a
bout t
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he local area's history. If the host followed t
hese solution,
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it would be better and the fame will be spread out t
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ietnam, even the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Take for granted
  • Economical constraints
  • Routine obligations
  • Programming
  • Cater
  • Engagement
  • Community involvement
  • Personal connection
  • Cultural relevance
  • Discounts
  • Sense of ownership
  • Interactive exhibits
  • Local traditions
  • Field trips
  • Cultural bond
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