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Fossil fuels are themain source of energy around the world. However, people are being encouraged to use alternative energy sources such as wind energy, solar energy and so on. Do you think this is a positive or negative development and why.

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Never before in
hostory
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history
, have there been so much requirement of
energy
 as right now. Violence and chaos over
energy
 have been an
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 fact. Fossil fuels, being the major source has
deteriorately
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deteriorated
deteriorate
 reduced due to excess consumption.
On
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this
 context, it is advocated that to use other
posiible
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possible
energy
sources
.
This
 essay agrees
to
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 the notion
os
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of
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 substitute
energy
sources
.
To begin
 with, the less
the
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fossil fuel the better the environment.
Primiarily
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Primarily
, the toxic byproducts of fuel pumped into the atmosphere could have been reduced which in turn alleviate the issue of global warming.
Secondly
, the death toll and the lung disease at coal mines have been diminished just by substituting the supplemental
sources
. In a nutshell,
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 a bliss to find out reciprocal
sources
 for the depleting power source. Admittedly, the main
complimentary
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 source of
energy
 is solar power as tapping it is cheaper.
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