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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Technology
 has revolutionized the whole world. It has
also
 become so obvious part of the
education
system
 that people start to think about that, whether it is going to replace the
teachers
.
This
 essay will enlighten how
technology
 is overtaking the
education
system
 and whether it is going to replace the
teachers
 in the near future or not.
Technology
 has recently been
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 enormously in the
education
 sector. Apart from its advancement and too much involvement in our
education
system
, it is not going to take the role of
teachers
 at the school.
Teachers
 are the building blocks of any
education
system
, they not only teach you but they learn about the personalities of the students, their liking and disliking. Whereas,
on the other
hand
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 computer can do calculations, can check the tests but they are not going to teach you human interaction. Artificial intelligence can be helpful as a helping aid for the
teachers
 in classrooms but they cannot replace the
teachers
.
Teachers
 are
also
 using so many tools in the classroom which facilitate them and make work easier for them e.g., google docs, PowerPoint, word, endnote, wikis and much more. But at the same
point
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this
technology
 cannot let you know when is the right time to take
break
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 in the class, how to handle the student when he is facing some emotional problems. So all these things give a clear conclusion that
technology
 can be a helping aid for the
teachers
 and for the students but
teachers
 cannot be replaced by machines in any way in near future.
Hence
, in
conclusion
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 I would say, it is always good to have all the information about the new advancements in
technology
 and we should use in the classroom in order to facilitate the progress, but it cannot be used as a replacement to
teachers
 in any mean.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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