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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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University
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 are very debatable. Some people consider that all
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university
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 what they want to
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. While the
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 think that they should only
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 the
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 are thought more beneficial for the future,
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 as linking to science and technology.
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choices are superior. In my opinion,the
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 and faculties from science and technology to humanitarian
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. Not all
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people have the same interest area.
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, some
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 prefer to be a painter, some choose
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language teacher while
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others
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 want to be an engineer. They cannot be
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taught
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identical
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students
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 what they have to choose to
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curiosity
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 those humans' work.
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others
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 believe that
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 should only
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 to learn science or technology related
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. It is certainly clear those
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 are becoming more and more popular. But it does not mean that except
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 branches, the
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 are useless. If all humans were forced to
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 the same
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, the other fields of need in the world would be completely empty. As I have discussed, there are different approaches to the question.
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, I think only
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 themselves are responsible for their future and their
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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