People are becoming famous with the help of TV programmes and the internet. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Social media is a really useful thing for some
reasons
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. With the help of the
internet
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you can easily become
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we
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, famous. It is not really hard
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well-
knowned
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known
by TV programmes or the Internet. No matter how old we are if you can do at least "something" interesting to other social media users, I guarantee you guys can get a little bit of popularity
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have disadvantages.
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it is because you can easily get tones of hate for doing or saying something wrong. Not all
people
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will like us - and
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is
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. Some
people
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always share
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their opinion in
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section and it is
pretty
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normal thing these days. But the main thing is how you will feel?
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. The way how you feel, I mean your mental health is more important than your
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number. Some words
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you
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address may judge you really hard, and you may have issues with your health. To be honest all famous
people
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cancelled for no
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, because of unhappy haters. They may send you rude messages with bad context so just don't pay attention.
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advice is
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by
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of popular
people
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. Ignoring - is the key
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good and peaceful life. Just enjoy your life and do everything you want. All we live in
modern
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century, we have
a big possibilities
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to the bright future. So, become
whoever
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you want! And do not be afraid to do something wrong. All we humans and can do mistakes. Take it easy!
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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