With the fast pace of modern life, more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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today’s hectic world everything has changed into being mechanical and super-fast, there is an influx in
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who replace fast
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food
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eating fast
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can cause some
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problems in my opinion having fast
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in rush times could be
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cheap choice.
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hand, eating fast
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to a large extent can harm
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body and orgasms as it usually contains
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amount of preservatives and additives.
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because
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holder aim is to process
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with less price with the aim of
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attention.
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normal
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neglect the importance of their
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and scarify their
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to the affordable price of fast
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containing oil in excess and
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, irrespective of all, is not a prime disadvantage nowadays there is
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high control over
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of fast foods and processed foods and they are made under the most hygienic conditions.
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the other hand, the lifestyles have been
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widely, since
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have to spend long hours outside at work or hustling around they often face
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of time.
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, they cannot spend long hours
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their desirable and
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healthy meals at home as it is
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problems that can cause
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about traditional
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fast
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has low cost and there is
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alternative for
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of
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in society.
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could be a high advantage for many that really can’t afford
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cost of living and without
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many would suffer from starvation. In general, having fast
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as a main meal all the
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wouldn’t benefit us,
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,
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industry has developed and is often controlled by safety organizations.
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