The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plans for its development. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps demonstrate a small town
centre
named Islip, in its current form and its proposed expansion.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the plan is to expand and modernize the
centre
to allow for more stores and a greater focus on new
housings
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,
in addition
new
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establishment will be added with extra space for activities. Currently, Islip town
centre
consists of only a main road which is running east to west,
park
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a park
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,
school
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a school
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, housing and a row of shops
that is
along the countryside.
According to
proposal
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, only the school and the park will maintain their original position
although
the size of the
later
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latter
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will be reduced. The most significant development will be the extension of new facilities
for
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instance,
car
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a car
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park, shopping
centre
, bus station, pedestrians and new
housings
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housing
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.
However
, there will be no more countryside as
plan
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the plan
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show the correction of roads into
dual
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a dual
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carriageway.
Thus
the main road will be no more in use by the reason of the conversion to pedestrians only.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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