Should education and healthcare be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be the responsibility of people to pay for these services? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Education
and healthcare
is
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basic rights of human.
although
the number of aspects
people
bear the expense for
education
and health in developing countries, In the rich countries The
government
provide
this
kind of fundamental issue.I firmly believe that the
government
ought to be responsible for
this
prime aspect.To illustrate that as pivotal needs it must be free to all and
people
never be accountable for paying the cost of
education
and healthcare because they pay tax to the
the
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government
.
To begin
with,among the prime needs spreading
education
and make stong healthy nation is the most important aspect.
However
,to ensure those factors the
government
must
committed
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to the mass
people
in any country.,
unfortunately
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we can see in many countries which is under developing they can not mitigate basic rights,
For instance
,In Bangladesh which is still developing, the
government
is unable to provide important rights
such
as
education
and health care. even though,
people
submitting
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their
government
tax on time.
As a result
,
people
have to put on extra value for the state of health and schooling which
is make
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them more frustrating and sometimes they get in trouble to maintain
family
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.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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