To achieve personal happiness, the relationships we have with other people (friends, colleagues, family) are more essential than every other thing. Issues like wealth and occupations take the second place. Write to support this claim.

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At present, humankind put prime importance on material wealth. Numerous
people
stay away from their family members and close friends to lead a prosperous
life
. In my opinion, individuals should maintain
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close contact with their near and dear ones to keep themselves happy. In
this
essay, I will focus on the discussion
how
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the experiences of elderly and rich
people
help us understand the significance of relationships with our relatives and others in our
happiness
.
Firstly
,
majority
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of the old age
people
underscore the quality of individuals’ association with their siblings and parents because their experience is that
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communication with family plays
momentous
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role in the individuals’ joyfulness.
For example
, senior citizens ask with younger generation how much they contact
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their guardians and friends, as well as establish
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relationship
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with their social network.
Furthermore
, they inspire their children and acquaintances to maintain good relations with their significant ones and
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workmates
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work mates
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. These actions of elderly humans reflect the importance of
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connection with
people
to live human
life
cheerfully.
Next
, those who have great careers or lots of materials, but lack a circle of close friends and loving family always have emptiness in their
heart
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.
For example
, numerous well-known celebrities around the world share that they are looking for human beings who truly love and care for them because they cannot live
happy
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life
without
such
pupils around them even if they are prosperous.
Moreover
, rich human beings are ready to pay any price to buy
happiness
although
they cannot buy
this
qualitative thing with their money.
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confirms that how
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momentous is the presence of companies or loving partners for the
happiness
of rich and successful individuals. In conclusion, the feelings experiences of elders and wealthy celebrities show the significance of humans’ relationship with their family and social network to live a happy
life
. Only materials or a high position does not give satisfaction to
people
.
Therefore
, I strongly recommend that we need
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close contact with our mates and relatives to live our
life
with
happiness
.
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