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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Traditional schools follow the format of studying in groups.With the development of the
Internet
 and new education method, some children would prefer to study at home virtually. In terms of outcomes and effectiveness, I hold the view that studying in a group is more beneficial than learning online at home.
Although
 the
Internet
 is a very useful education tool, students can obtain
information
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 they need only by typing keywords in the search bar which is very time-efficient,
this
 kind of study pattern needs a high level of
self-discipline
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 of students and
also
 high
information
 accuracy.
For example
,
information
 from Wikipedia is editable by all
internet
 users but no one can guarantee the
information
 is correct.
Therefore
, students might need to spend more time and effort examining the details.
In contrast
, studying in a group can provide youngsters with not only informative knowledge but
also
 skills and values they needed to equip with for their future career paths.
Firstly
, teenagers can share their knowledge and values in classrooms which is not only obtained from books and words.
Moreover
, Socialising is another essential part of working and making friends.
Thus
, soft skills
such
 as communication
skill
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 are vital and could only be experienced when studying in groups. It is not saying that learning online has no advantages,
however
, undoubtedly, schools can share more than knowledge and words but experience and values. In comparison, studying in groups are far more effective and useful than on the
Internet
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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