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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is commonly suggested that educator instructions ought to assume the responsibility for giving learners lessons in how to conduct themselves honourably. Others claim that knowledgeable subjects had to be only taught in school. From my perspective,
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 sides of statements for a variety of following reasons. On the one hand, it can deny that transmission of knowledge plays an indispensable role. It makes the grade in developing the productive thinking of academic
students
. To cite an example, when studying Maths under
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 of educationalists, followers have always thought about the complicated question to discover the answer with the help of the brain.
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, it is step by step to form mathematical thought, which helps
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 become more and more intelligent. Another prospect that
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 many great benefits in spreading out academic knowledge is to learn Music. It
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students
 a hand to boost memory, build task endurance, lighten their mood and reduce anxiety and depression after a
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 difficult subject.
On the other hand
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 should deliver pupils a lecture in have high-quality attitude so that they are aware of their mistake and to correct the fault. It not only has assistance for
students
 to gain
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 skills in modern life, but it
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 deep gratitude to the teachers. In conclusion, from what has been mentioned above, it is greatly
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 when having
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 teaching academic knowledge and basic ethical judgments
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