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On the one hand , accidents becomes big concern in todays time may of individuals lost their live becouse of this There a

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On the one hand , accidents becomes
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individuals lost their
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becouse
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because
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 we hear or read in news.
this
 happing can only improve by following the safety rules along with speed slowdown.the vast proportion of natives sides with the former view, as a better control could be attained on the vehicle
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 if the pace is less.
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 could be easily and efficiently handled in case of any emergency,
then
 too, if some tragedy occurs,
then
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 the injury would not be severe. For an instance, In my area the upper range to drive is 40km, while driving down a highway, cars often have greater momentum, so police employees keep an eye on that and impose heavy fines on the rule breaker.
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 but the public
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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