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On the one hand , accidents becomes big concern in todays time may of individuals lost their live becouse of this

#hand #accidents #concern #todays #time #individuals #becouse
On the one hand , accidents
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big
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today's
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of
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individuals lost their
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becouse
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because
 of
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number
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 of cases we hear or read in news.
this
 happing can only improve by following the mentioned safety rule along with speed slowdown.the vast proportion of natives sides with the former view, as a better control could be attained on the vehicle
,
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 if the pace is less.
Such
automobile
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 could be easily and efficiently handled in case of any emergency,
then
 too, if some tragedy occurs,
then
also
 the injury would not be severe. For an instance, In my area the upper range to drive is 40km, while driving down a highway, cars often have greater momentum, so police employees keep an eye on that and impose heavy fines on the rule breaker.
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 not only helps the driver and his family safe
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 but the public
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. Still, I ponder that
this
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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