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Some people hold that the development of modern science and technology leads to environmental pollution and energy shortage. What do you think ?

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The advancement of automation and information has brought a huge development to human civilization.
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 thinks it leads the environmental pollution more dramatically. In my essay, I will present my opinion of
this
 point. During the process of formation and development of world history. Inventions have been created by scientists or inventors. Particular in transportation, when the steam engine was invented. We have many things like cars, trains and even planes for the far distance we have to go. Entertainment has a leap when tv comes. Scientist creates more vaccine or medicine are helping people cure their illness like cancer, Alzheimer. Undeniable, the benefits we have from science and technology bring to our humankind. We can go to any place in the world and when the night comes we have lights shine for us. The convenience of the internet is helping on contact, work, study many different things in our daily life. In recent years, The environment has been polluted from the emissions of vehicles. People are finding ways out through many solutions from science and technology. Power electricity can get from the energy of wind, sun, ... Scientists are researching to decrease the amount of garbage and emission to the environment. society are aware of the importance to protect the climate. In the future not far, we will bring back our blue planet. Do not blame for the development of systems and automation. Turn back and see what you have done to protect our planet. Eventually, after giving my opinion. I think the community should be aware of the protection climate. Do not blame anything and see what you can do for the place you are living or the planet you are staying on.
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