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The leaders or directors of organizations are often elderly people. However, some sat that young people can also take the lead of organizations or companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a debatable issue that many organizations are leaded by elder
people
, whereas others believe that youngsters
also
 run the companies . I personally disagree with
this
 statement because adults are inexperienced and sometimes they are not capable of making wise decisions.
Firstly
, the organization needs a highly skilled person who can lead the
company
 properly and take it on the path of progress.
For example
, a person works for the
company
 as an employee, he works hard and gets a promotion as a reward for his hard work, after that struggle he becomes a manager of the
company
 with lots of
experience
 and hard work. It will be easy for him to
take
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make
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 the right decisions because he knows everything about the
company
 ,
however
, if young
people
appointed
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are appointed
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in
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to
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 high positions, they may take the wrong steps due to lack of
experience
 that will be detrimental for
company
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the company
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.
Secondly
, old
people
 have lots of calmness which they get with the age because they are passing in that situations which make them problem solver whereas that
are
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is
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 less in youngsters.
For instance
, my father dealt with so many problems and he knows every situation so, I always go to him
for
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to
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 getting any solution because his
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advice
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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 are always valuable for me.
Moreover
, business runs with knowledge and maturity that comes through high
experience
therefore
, companies prefer old
people
 rather
then
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than
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 young ones. In conclusion,
although
 young's can run the
company
 with their capacity,
experience
 and maturity is the valuable thing which not be ignored for companies progress.
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