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Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the
university
 fee has increased and to have more opportunity for graduates to find a job some people think that
arts
subjects
such
 no be put in the course and need to add more practical degree
courses
 to maximise student’s chances of employment.
This
 definitely disagrees with
this
 statement and discusses why.
First
 of all, practical degree
courses
 are important to let
students
 learn more skills that will be needed in the job. Due to having those
courses
, graduates’
students
 can quickly go smoothly through the work and have a more positive benefit for their future. It is definitely a good method to plus
students
’ opportunities for finding their job.
In addition
, it seems that
arts
subjects
 are not very important for graduates while knowing some history or having some philosophy knowledge can let
students
 to create more ideas or thoughts and have more knowledge or backgrounds that can be used in the future.
For example
, if you are working in an advertising business article
courses
 can let you have more idea with colours or balance for a picture and have a better show for the products. You can use anything that you learn in the
university
 and have a more flexible thought.
As a result
, it can bring benefits to you. In conclusion, I think that
arts
subjects
 should be taught in the
university
 because having that knowledge might bring you a more flexible idea.
However
, practical degree
courses
 are
also
 important to let graduates’
students
 can quickly go through the jobs. Both
courses
 are important so I disagree with the statement, holding that
university
 should not take put
arts
subjects
 whereas can add more practical
courses
.
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