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Universities should take the same number of man and women in each major. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Some individuals have opinions that all universities have taken
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 by similar
numbers
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 of male and female people. Personally , I completely disagree with
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 view.
To begin
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, people think the classes should consist of the same number of
students
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 by their gender. Because, If girls
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 more than
boys
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 ,
then
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 it will be uncomfortable for
boys
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.
Moreover
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, by their thoughts , they should be ordered by their equal number, so
then
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 it ma look regularly. Another side is that these universities are not special to teach only male or female
students
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. So , all classes should be separated into two parts by the same
numbers
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 of girls and
boys
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.
On the other hand
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 , there may be an argument to
this
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 view by
students
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 .but, it is not the main reason that when girls want to study with more female members of the class , at the same time
boys
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 prefer it too. So, the same
numbers
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 do not matter for them .
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 ,during
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school , a period some
students
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 may leave these classes or go to another university , so because of
this
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 situation teachers or the staff of school cannot control their equal
numbers
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 by gender.
Furthermore
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, there are not any rules or lows to
this
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 that their
numbers
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 should be the same.so teachers may not pay attention to their
numbers
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 .
Instead
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 of
this
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 argument schools should teach them by the high quality of their services. To sum up, I disagree with
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 statement, because , it is not necessary to focus
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 . I think they should improve their education or other things generally
besides
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 their average
numbers
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 by gender.
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