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Universities should take the same number of man and women in each major. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Some individuals have opinions that all universities have taken
students
 by similar
numbers
 of male and female people. Personally , I completely disagree with
this
 view.
To begin
, people think the classes should consist of the same number of
students
 by their gender. Because, If girls
numbers
 more than
boys
 ,
then
 it will be uncomfortable for
boys
.
Moreover
, by their thoughts , they should be ordered by their equal number, so
then
 it ma look regularly. Another side is that these universities are not special to teach only male or female
students
. So , all classes should be separated into two parts by the same
numbers
 of girls and
boys
.
On the other hand
 , there may be an argument to
this
 view by
students
 .but, it is not the main reason that when girls want to study with more female members of the class , at the same time
boys
 prefer it too. So, the same
numbers
 do not matter for them .
Moreover
 ,during
the
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school , a period some
students
 may leave these classes or go to another university , so because of
this
 situation teachers or the staff of school cannot control their equal
numbers
 by gender.
Furthermore
, there are not any rules or lows to
this
 that their
numbers
 should be the same.so teachers may not pay attention to their
numbers
 .
Instead
 of
this
 argument schools should teach them by the high quality of their services. To sum up, I disagree with
this
 statement, because , it is not necessary to focus
on
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 . I think they should improve their education or other things generally
besides
 their average
numbers
 by gender.
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