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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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These days, the regime spends a large part of its budget not only on public
services
,
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 but
also
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arts
.
Although
 I agree that it is important to spend
fund
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 on public
services
, I do not think spending on the
arts
 is a waste of wealth. There are several reasons for spending a significant amount of the government budget on public
services
.
First
 and foremost, public
services
 are the things
such
 as hospitals, roads and schools, and these things determine the quality of life that most of us will have.
For example
, if the law does not spend enough
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 on hospitals, the health of our society may decline.
Similarly
, if not enough payment is spent on schools, our children may not be properly educated.
Also
, it will be the poor in our society that will be affected more if we do not spend enough on these things because they are the ones more dependent on
such
services
.
However
,
this
 does not mean that the
arts
 should be completely neglected.
To begin
, it is difficult for many
arts
 institutions to generate much profit, so without some help from the power, many theatres and other
such
 places may have to close.
Moreover
, the
arts
also
 have an important impact on our quality of life. Many people get great pleasure in going to see music and theatre performances so it is important that the authority assists
such
 institutions so that they can continue to provide entertainment to the public. To sum up, there are clear benefits of ensuring a large amount of investment goes into public
services
 as
this
 influences the quality of life for nearly all of us. That said, I do not believe spending
fund
 on the
arts
 is a waste of
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 as
this
 too provides important benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural enrichment
  • expression of creativity
  • promote diversity
  • enhance social cohesion
  • boost tourism
  • job creation
  • stimulate economic growth
  • improve quality of life
  • essential services
  • maintenance and development
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