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In most successful companies, some people think that communicaton between employers and workers is the most important factor. Other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued by some that dialogue between co-workers is very important for a profit of foundations, while others some
people
 support that other subjects are more important. I believe
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communication
 is the most effective thing for the
corporations
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 success. On one hand, there is some believer support that some factors as targets, boss
behavior
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 on workers and money are more important than
communication
 among collaborators.
However
, money has a good effect on our life and employees need that for sustaining their life,
also
 another important issue is boss
behaviors
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 in
company
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 that could cause some good or bad event on the firm lives.
Furthermore
, the targets have
strong
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 impact on workers.
For instance
, if bosses or the
compaines
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companies
 give
logical
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goal
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 for their career, they could be successful and give themselves on their job. For
this
 reason, the
companies
 will succeed
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 their financial subjects.
On the other hand
, some experts support that
communication
 between employers is
most
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 effective thing
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the
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companies
 success. Links
of
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among workers have
a
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 enormous influence on the future of the
companies
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 and that links can establish a bridge quality to the customer.
For example
, when
people
 help each other, a group of problems will be dumped, so
people
 will be happy in their
work life
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 and that situation could be reflected on their consumers like quality. In my
oppinion
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opinion
,
communication
 is the most important factor for the foundations future come which should be organised from the Human Resources Department. In conclusion, ı can understand why some
people
 believe the other factors are more important for
companies
 success, it seems to me that links of co-workers have a gorgeous impact on
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sustainable
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 of the
companies
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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