In most successful companies, some people think that communicaton between employers and workers is the most important factor. Other people say that other factors are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is argued by some that dialogue between co-workers is very important for a profit of foundations, while others some
people
support that other subjects are more important. I believe
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communication
is the most effective thing for the
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success. On one hand, there is some believer support that some factors as targets, boss
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on workers and money are more important than
communication
among collaborators.
However
, money has a good effect on our life and employees need that for sustaining their life,
also
another important issue is boss
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in
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that could cause some good or bad event on the firm lives.
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impact on workers.
For instance
, if bosses or the
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companies
give
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goal
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for their career, they could be successful and give themselves on their job. For
this
reason, the
companies
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their financial subjects.
On the other hand
, some experts support that
communication
between employers is
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effective thing
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the
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companies
success. Links
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among workers have
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enormous influence on the future of the
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and that links can establish a bridge quality to the customer.
For example
, when
people
help each other, a group of problems will be dumped, so
people
will be happy in their
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and that situation could be reflected on their consumers like quality. In my
oppinion
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opinion
,
communication
is the most important factor for the foundations future come which should be organised from the Human Resources Department. In conclusion, ı can understand why some
people
believe the other factors are more important for
companies
success, it seems to me that links of co-workers have a gorgeous impact on
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of the
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