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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #lives #change
The line chart shows global
water
consumption
 in agriculture, industrial
use
 and domestic
use
 from 1900 to 2000. The amount of agricultural
water
use
 was always the most, rising from about 500 km3 to around 3,000 km3 at the end of the period.
Similarly
, industrial and domestic
water
use
also
 experienced an increasing trend. From a little
water
consumption
, they grew slightly to approximately 200 km3 and 90 km3 respectively in 1950. From that onwards, there was a noticeable growth in industrial
water
use
, with about 1,000 km3 consumed, while domestic
water
use
 still increased slowly to just below only 500 km3. In the
second
 table,
water
consumption
 in Brazil and Congo in 2000 is presented. Overall, there was a positive association between irrigated land and
water
consumption
 per person. To be more specific,
water
consumption
 per head in Brazil was much higher than that in Congo (395 m3 and 8 m3 each) and, at the same time, much more land needed to be irrigated in the country of South America, 265 times. From the two charts, it is obvious that agriculture is the main section to consume
water
 worldwide.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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