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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

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Dear David, I have received your letter, and I am so glad that you all are doing fine.
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, I thank you for taking me into confidence in order to consult about a decision as important as either getting a job or going to a college. While I consider both propositions to be very crucial for personal and professional growth, I think that timing and personal circumstances are
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 an important decision. And, knowing you personally for quite some time, I don’t think that timing and circumstances are exactly on your side as far as the issue of going to a college is concerned. In fact, I know, how you don’t like doing so much homework and love to explore new places and opportunities. So, I would suggest that you should gain some job experience before you start college. You should get a job as a front desk agent at a hotel because I know you have an outgoing personality, and you like to meet and talk to different kinds of people. After all, a hotel is a place which is visited by all kinds of new people almost every day. I wish you the very best of luck. Warm wishes, Antony
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Juncture
  • Firsthand
  • Practical skills
  • Theoretical focus
  • Financial independence
  • Career advancement
  • Real-world experience
  • Part-time studies
  • Online courses
  • Financial stability
  • Career goals
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