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Traffic And Housing Problems Could Be Solved By Moving Large Companies, Factories And Their Employees To The Countryside. Do You Agree Or Disagree?

#traffic #companies #factories #employees #countryside
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It is argued that with the view of congestion and resident , industries and their workers should shift to the rural
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 believe that moving to the
countryside
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 can help to control these troubles. There are countless benefits to shifting village sides. The 
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 and foremost reason is that the employment will be increased in the 
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areas
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. To elaborate, 
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 offer more job opportunities to 
people
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 because of Large businesses and Factories. If these industries migrate to  rural 
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 adults do not have a need to move to urban 
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 to get the occupation. 
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, they can do work in their own 
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. In fact, more population shift in that 
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 to find jobs. For instance, while the biggest workplace In 
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,
people
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 go there and look many Housing and traffic jam problems due to their working hour rush.
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,
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 have not only large employment rates but
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 better schools, education and transportation system.
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, These facilities make urban
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 more crowded, as if these things are moving to the
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, it would help reduce rush In developed
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. Owing to large population
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 make houses in high demand,
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 it can be solved by moving companies and other businesses to the village sides. Rural
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people
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 can
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 enjoy these facilities which they cannot imagine in their life. In conclusion, moving to the
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 is a good idea to reduce the overcrowded in urban
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 it would be helpful to give a better life to villagers.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • housing problems
  • countryside
  • large companies
  • factories
  • employees
  • urban areas
  • land availability
  • relocate
  • stimulate economic development
  • challenges
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • rural areas
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