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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach in teaching?

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Introduction
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resrospective
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retrospective
 era,
traditional
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the traditional
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method
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 of teaching is
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beginning
 to an end.
Introduction
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 of new technology in
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method
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the method
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 of teaching is
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 a trend.
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 development has both negative and positive effects and
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 will discuss both in succeeding paragraphs.
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To commence with the cardinal
benifits
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benefits
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 it shows that individuals could
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interact,show's emotion
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 the passion of teachers and
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student
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students
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,
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likewise
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 interact as a human being.
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 a teacher can commend a
student
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 and reprimand for his or her
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wrongdoing
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wrong doing
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.
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more interactions in teaching
traditional
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the traditional
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method
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is
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 visible.
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In
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the modern
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 era,most
of
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young
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the young
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 age are into technology in teaching.Using gadgets as part of
teaching
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the teaching
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method
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methods
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 could attract them
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the most
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.
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However
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 there are
consecquences
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consequences
could
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 be encountered using
this
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method
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.
For
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example
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 a
student
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 could easily construct
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apply
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grammar using an application on
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apply
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certain gadgets .
Body paragraph 5
To conclude using
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the traditional
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method
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 of teaching has a positive trend overall and has advantages.
Conclusion
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However
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 using technology have disadvantages
on
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in
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 the way
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student
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a student
the student
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 may approach it.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • interactive
  • personalized learning
  • collaboration
  • cost-effectiveness
  • engagement
  • digital resources
  • virtual classrooms
  • educational technology
  • learning styles
  • information overload
  • distraction
  • screen fatigue
  • inequality in access
  • teacher-student relationship
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