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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach in teaching?

#lectures #method #numbers #students #technology #approach
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the traditional
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 of new technology in
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 will discuss both in succeeding paragraphs. To commence with the cardinal
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benefits
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 it shows that individuals could interact,show's emotion
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 the passion of teachers and
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 interact as a human being.
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 a teacher can commend a
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wrong doing
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Therefore
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method
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 visible. In
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young
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the young
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method
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 could attract them
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 there are
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consequences
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 be encountered using
this
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 a
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grammar using an application on
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certain gadgets . To conclude using
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the traditional
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 of teaching has a positive trend overall and has advantages.
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 using technology have disadvantages
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a student
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 may approach it.
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