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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. Whut factors contribute to joh satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation ofjob sutisfaction for all workers?

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In the modern world, people have to
work
 about 40 years during their whole life.
Therefore
, an increasing number of individuals pay more attention to
job
satisfaction
 rather than tolerant undesirable jobs.
This
 essay will attempt to look into the key factors. The
first
 factor for enhancing
satisfaction
 is working in a cosy environment. In the past, some
workers
, especially in plants, had to
work
 in terrible conditions to get more ailments due to exposure to detrimental substances.
However
, people are now more concerned about their health than higher salaries. The working environment has become a crucial part of
job
satisfaction
. An appropriate working schedule is
also
 a factor of
job
satisfaction
. If staff were asked to
work
 overtime 6 days a week, they would not feel energetic and would become resistant to
work
. Numerous
workers
 in modern China are suffering from long and ineffective working hours, which is called ‘996’. More and more labourers try to get rid of
this
 type of workplace by resignation.
Therefore
, a suitable schedule, included enough breaks, can improve one’s working conditions and feel satisfied. As of now, not all
workers
 are getting satisfactory jobs. Exploitative attitudes of the capitalists still take a long time to change.
Therefore
, it is not realistic to meet the expectation of all employees. To summarize, there are two primary components about
job
satisfaction
:
work
 environment and appropriate schedule. While I
also
 reckon it is unrealistic about Meeting all
workers
' expectations regarding
job
satisfaction
,
this
 situation will be changed in the future.
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