Some people are afraid to go out for fear of being robbed on the streets. Still, there are robberies that happen inside houses. What do you think is the best thing a person can do to ensure his/her own security? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Apart from theoretical learning in class, I

also

attached importance to broadening my vision of environmental sectors in

real-world

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internship

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September, I paid a visit to Baoshan Iron & Steel, a leading integrated iron and steel company in China. I witnessed that the pollutants were discharged after

treatment

or recycled like that the domestic water would be converted into industrial water, and that Baosteel has not reduced production efficiency or greatly increased production cost because of terminal

treatment

. It made me realize that the data-based descriptions in sewage

treatment

, replacing the empirical management, significantly improve processing efficiency.

For instance

, after the dewatering of biochemical

sludge

and deep chemical

sludge

dewatering plants, the water content of the resulting cake has a significant impact on the subsequent disposal of the

sludge

. Applying computer systems to monitor the status of wastewater

treatment

operations,

sludge

cake moisture content can be monitored in

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, so that adjustments to dosing and dewatering equipment can be made. The constant involvement in recognising and addressing environmental issues through data analysis impelled me to pursue

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study in

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domain.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

187 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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