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''In recent decades, playing computer games has become a popular activity for children of all ages. Many people claim that this hobby offers few benefits beyond entertainment or relaxation and may, in fact, be harmful to a child’s development. Do you agree with this statement? ''

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In the modern world nowadays,
computer
games
has
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 greatly become popular all over the world, especially for
the
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young
people
. While many
people
 don'
t
 think
this
 sort of entertainment could bring any
beneficials
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beneficial
 to the young generations and some thinks that violent
games
 could be harmful to a child's development. But overall
i
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 don'
t
 agree with
this
 statement. Throwback to the old times when none of us have the access to
smartphone
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smartphones
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 or
computer
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computers
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 children usually spend their time
on
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watching televisions or
read
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 a book and even hanging out with their peers. Since now after few decades passed
people
's entertainment has changed, everything become more
mordern
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modern
 and less traditional but it doesn'
t
 mean it's a bad thing.
People
who's
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 grew up in recent decades they attracted to
computer
games
 more than other entertainment activities because it's more enjoyable for them,
specially
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 for children cause at
their
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a
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 young age they can learn much more than just a game. They can learn plenty of skills from the game
such
 as problem-solving, teamwork, or even strategic skills. But in many cases, there's always a good and a bad as long as they're under parent's observation
,
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 because I believe that parents are taking the most important role that can control and choose the right content of
games
 for their child. Playing
games
 is
also
 helps a child to grow healthier. Parents can'
t
 always control their kids especially
who
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 they meet in school, if we allowed kids to play
computer
games
 or video
games
 their mindset will change when it comes to making new friends, they will choose a healthier group of friends to hang out and play video
games
 together after school rather than being with their bad peers by smoking cigarettes or doing drugs at a young age. But it is said that
computer
games
 or video
games
 could be addictive to
the
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young
people
at
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 all ages from which they get distracted and ignore important things in their life.
However
, I believe the benefits of
computer
games
 bring to us outweigh the drawbacks. Online
games
 themselves are not harmful,
thus
 how they are used within control to make the best use is the most important.
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