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Some people argue that it is best to accept a bad situation , such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money . Others believe that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals conclude that a
person
 should accept the calamity running in his ,
such
 as a disappointing job else scarcity of money , Whereas others believe that it is finner to make an effort on improving those situations . In the forthcoming paragraph , I would like to discuss both
the
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views and
accordingly
 elaborate my
opinion
. Taking into account
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view of the former , some people opine that a
person
 should not worry about improvising the disaster a
person
 is facing ,
instead
 of he should welcome the
situation
 and move on. Some people attempt to improvise the
situation
 but in the
process
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 they construct the
situation
 even worse and
postly
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mostly
 they regret it . So it's easy to claim your fate and move ahead .
However
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 a money deficient
person
 worrying about his condition , Irrespective of his effort non will make it better . Considering the
opinion
 of the latter ,
a
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 individual should not only welcome the disasters in his entity but
also
you
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can improvise the circumstances by an endeavour . In
this
 accursed world , not a thing will
acquired
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 by you
nevertheless
 you reach out for it . In any
event
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 a
person
 should be passionate about his state of living and fabricate it
accordingly
his
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 discretion .A poor
person
 will remain poor until he steps up and attempt to improve his state of living . In my
opinion
 , a
person
 should work hard no matter what the circumstances are and to forge a better life
instead
 of just whining or accepting the
situation
 but not improving the
situation
 . A famous quote goes like "Hard work always pays off ". So at
last
 in my
opinion
 , a
person
 should forge his life according to his discretion .
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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