In many countries today, many highly qualified graduates struggle to find emloymemt. What factors may have caused this situation? What can be done abput it?

These days high-degreed of universities are trying to find
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branches of engineering
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but my university needs me to save the master's job.
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to cities and find
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made for. Evidently, we can see huge immigrations to the cities and find no job. Seeing the problem can lead us to solve it,
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70% of their
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, if they can not do
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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