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Completing a university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people thinking that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important.Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#university #education #job #hand #people #skills
Nowadays, a person’s job is his/her most important characteristic. Occupation determines income, facilities and respect of
people
. From the past to the present, it would appear that university education and developed skills have been very important to get good
jobs
.
First
 of all , it must be said that universities are the places that human beings go after obtaining basic knowledge in high school to develop the amount of their science. Designers of the curriculums of different academic disciplines choose modern syllabus due to students
have
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 good academic achievement.
Further
 education causes educated
people
 could marshal facts better and
also
 they would be better in data-gathering. Those characteristics could be very useful for companies and
as a result
people
 who have those properties would achieve
better
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 job.
On the other
hand
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 youth who have completed university education are smarter or it can be said they have faster minds and as a
consequence
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 they usually get better
jobs
. In
different
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 way of thinking it is thought that economic institutions in order to raise their productivity and make their output better are always seeking
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more experienced
people
, most administrators of these companies believe, they should somehow motivate experienced experts to work in their offices,
in other words
, job seekers who are more experienced are most likely to have good
jobs
. Another argument is employees who have developed soft skills could help other workers to communicate with their clients better. It is clear most employers like to hire that kind of
applicants
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 more than others. In
summary
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 it has been shown that most of the time good
jobs
 are waiting for
people
 who have more
experiences
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experience
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 in their
jobs
 and they have
better
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the better
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 condition and even more options to choose appropriate
jobs
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • specialized training
  • networking
  • baseline requirement
  • financial burden
  • hands-on experience
  • practical skills
  • soft skills
  • dynamic job market
  • entrepreneur
  • formal education
  • portfolio
  • hybrid approach
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