IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Many university students live with their families, while others live away from home because their universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations?

#university #students #families #home #universities #places #situations
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
With many students going to
university
 these days, some of them choose to stay with their families while
ohters
Correct your spelling
others
 decide to live alone during the period of their
study
. Regardless of which option is chosen, there are some benefits and drawbacks in both choices and
this
 essay will discuss
these
Correct determiner usage
apply
show examples
both views.
To begin
 with, not only positive aspects but
also
 negative aspects of living away
form
Correct your spelling
from
show examples
 family while studying at
university
 must be discussed. The main benefit of doing so is that students can establish an independent lifestyle. To illustrate, they have to deal with all house duties
such
 as washing clothes, cooking and cleaning when living without their parents.
Also
Add a comma
,Also
show examples
 they may need to pay their utility fees by themselves, which make them aware of how much their living costs are. These skills and
knowlege
Correct your spelling
knowledge
 are necessary for their future lives.
However
, it is true that there is a significant disadvantage of the
indipendent
Correct your spelling
independent
 life, which is possible
distruction
Correct your spelling
destruction
 of
study
.
This
 means, if there is no one who takes care of you, that it
migh
Correct your spelling
might
 be difficult to manage your time to
study
 since tertiary education is way harder than high school
learnings
Fix the agreement mistake
learning
show examples
 as well as you have to deal with extra house chores.
This
 can negatively impact
on
Change preposition
apply
show examples
your grade at
university
.
On the other hand
, commuting to
university
 from home
also
 have some merits and demerits. As
disscused
Correct your spelling
discussed
 above, they can be opposite to the advantage and
disadvantage
Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
show examples
 of living by themselves.
On
Change preposition
In
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
other words, the upside of staying home is the easier time management for their
study
 whereas the downside of
that is
 the difficulty of learning their independence. To conclude, there are some benefits and drawbacks in both living alone and
home
Change preposition
at home
show examples
;
thus
, it should be well considered before the decision is made.
Submitted by takepleasure4.30 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: