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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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It is often said that boarding
schools
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 are an excellent
option
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 for students.
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, the issue is not entirely straightforward, and arguments can
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 be made against the idea.
This
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 essay will discuss the debate, and give a concluding view. On the one hand, those who argue that boarding
schools
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 are a better
option
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 for
children
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 claim that
children
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 can easily learn to live
independent
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, and it is the best place to gain academic qualifications. It is well-known that many boarding
schools
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 have a discipline at the boarding
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 as morning and night routine. Many strict routines and rules teach
children
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 discipline. For these
reasons
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 some people advise that boarding
schools
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 are
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suitable places for
children
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 to study.
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, those who argue against
living
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leaving
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 their
children
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 at boarding claim that
parents
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 will lose control over their
children
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. They spend most of their time at
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schools
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school
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;
therefore
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,
parents
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 will not know what is happening in their
children
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’s daily
life
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lives
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.
For example
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,
parents
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 have no way to find
whether
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out whether
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 their
children
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 are
being
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healthy and whether
focusing
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they should focus
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 on their
study
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studies
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 by all
side
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 in there.
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, there will be
a
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empty distance between
children
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 and
parents
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. It seems that these reasons can be
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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 way of raising a child for their family.
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, it appears boarding
schools
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 can be a better
option
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 for
children
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 to learn to be independent.
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, it is not an excellent
option
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 because it does not give a chance to
parents
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 to control their
children
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 on a daily basis.
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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