Question: You are going to another country to study. You would like to do part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, - give details of your study plans - explain why you want to get a part-time job - suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Dear Srushti, It's been a while since we
last
talked. Hope
this
letter finds you in pink
of
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your health.
Actually
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,Actually

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i
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am writing
this
letter to inform you about my plans of studying in Canada.
Moreover
, when knowing about the Computer Science Diploma that you had studied overseas, I developed quite an interest in it and thought of pursuing it to enhance my skills and knowledge.
Also
, because my lectures are planned to start in February, the chances of me reaching Canada are quite higher the following week.
Besides
that, to pay for my expenses, taking up any kind of part-time job along with my studies would aid me.
Additionally
, owing to the fact that my parents are already burdened with the fees to be paid for the university, would like to reduce their financial load by taking up any job offered and paying back the loan that they took for my education.
Furthermore
, would you please help me find a job?
Next
, the fact that you have been residing in Canada for the past decades, Implies you are the right person to help me search for one. Is it possible to look up your old contacts and share my reference with your friends and colleagues? Waiting for your reply. Yours faithfully, Tahura
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The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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