A big salary is more important than job satisfaction

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Every
job
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comes with its pros and cons. It is argued that having a big
salary
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is more important than being satisfied with your
job
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I will argue that having a big
salary
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actually has way more disadvantages than
job
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satisfaction.
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having a bigger
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will most definitely lead to a lot of stress. Big earnings come with a lot more responsibilities which is very time-consuming.
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stress is very bad for human beings eventually that leads to many illnesses enjoy life becomes unhealthy.
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at a place that provides me with a very good paycheck. But
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I had that I ended up getting too much stress because of how much work I had to do. And
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never felt appreciated.
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I quit the
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.
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having a
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that brings you satisfaction comes with a lot of benefits. Even though it doesn't bring a big earning it gives you a feeling of
fullfilness
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fullness
full fitness
and good experience. To conclude having a big
salary
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is not what is most important in life.The most important thing is your health and you
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what you do even if that doesn't give you a big paycheck.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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