The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency(การกระทำผิดของเยาวชน), arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The cause of the violation and juvenile delinquency usually come from a society and environment.

For instance

, a group of

friends

and a family. Because most the

kids

are spending more age at school but in some situations still have newborns that have been growing up with terrible parents.

However

, children that have not been taken

care

of by their mothers were not always become

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community. So , it is not married women’s fault for working for their children most of the day. In

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essay, I will argue that many trouble that

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been caused by young society weren’

t

always come from an adult. Normally, most of the women have more roles looking after their

kids

than fathers because in the past, men have to work and women have to stay at home.

On the other hand

, young

people

’s attitude depends on their environment,

such

as

friends

and depressions from education. Mostly, they spend more time with their

friends

, which might lead them to a bad environment and have violations between groups.

However

, many problems young

people

now experience were not caused by their mother didn'

t

take

care

of them. Nowadays,

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crowd mostly have their own group, it could be study group, sport and etc. But there

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some

society

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that usually

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alone because they don'

t

have any

friends

or get bullied by another student. Which

this

problem cannot be solved by their parents even they have time or not. At school, it should have been teachers' responsibility to take

care

of their students. In summary, I disagree that some

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that

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caused by

kids

were not because their mom always busy with work and doesn'

t

have time to look after them. On top of that, young

people

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did not cause by their mom because there are some

people

that they don'

t

have a mom since they were

kids

but they were still growing up and became good

people

. A problem

such

as juvenile delinquency should have been taken

care

of as the cause ,not the solution.

For instance

, teachers, citizens law, or juvenile punishment.