The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency(การกระทำผิดของเยาวชน), arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

The cause of the violation and juvenile delinquency usually come from a society and environment.

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and a family. Because most the

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are spending more age at school but in some situations still have newborns that have been growing up with terrible parents.

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, children that have not been taken

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of by their mothers were not always become

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community. So , it is not married women’s fault for working for their children most of the day. In

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been caused by young society weren’

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always come from an adult. Normally, most of the women have more roles looking after their

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than fathers because in the past, men have to work and women have to stay at home.

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, young

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’s attitude depends on their environment,

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and depressions from education. Mostly, they spend more time with their

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, which might lead them to a bad environment and have violations between groups.

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, many problems young

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now experience were not caused by their mother didn'

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take

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of them. Nowadays,

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crowd mostly have their own group, it could be study group, sport and etc. But there

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some

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that usually

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alone because they don'

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have any

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or get bullied by another student. Which

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problem cannot be solved by their parents even they have time or not. At school, it should have been teachers' responsibility to take

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of their students. In summary, I disagree that some

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that

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caused by

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were not because their mom always busy with work and doesn'

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have time to look after them. On top of that, young

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's

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did not cause by their mom because there are some

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that they don'

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have a mom since they were

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but they were still growing up and became good

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. A problem

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as juvenile delinquency should have been taken

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of as the cause ,not the solution.

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, teachers, citizens law, or juvenile punishment.